Showing posts with label voice. Show all posts
Showing posts with label voice. Show all posts

Wednesday, 20 August 2014

Network News: On Teens, Treats and Peeking into Picture Books in Central North.



By Liz Miller

We’ve been a bit spoilt in recent months in Central North with not one, not two, but three visiting speakers who kindly agreed to come and share their expertise and work with us. First up were uber- experienced editors, Non Pratt and Emily Sharratt who came to talk to us about ‘How to Get Your Teen Novel Published’ as part of the Lincoln Inspired Festival. Except they didn’t just talk to us, they made us work as well!


Creating characters and voice 
Non and Emily contemplating what to ask us to do next.


Non spoke about creating characters and voice and then got us to do a couple of writing exercises to work out our own strengths and to help us to consider what we needed to be focussing on to create that all important ‘voice’.  Heads buzzing, Emily then moved onto plot and considered the narrative arc and journeying between each point of the arc before setting us another exercise. Heads whizzing, we moved onto themes and finding the ‘heart of a story’. Then, more writing but this time with a lucky dip bag!
Our thanks to Non and Emily for a thought provoking event. Yes we had to do our bit as well but we were all much the wiser for doing so. 


'Peek into Picture Books'

Our notebooks barely made it back into bags before we were welcoming our next visitor. This time it was our much anticipated ‘Peek into Picture Books’ with award-winning children’s illustrator, Lynne Chapman. Lynne is a member of our Lincoln SCBWI Facebook group and we were looking forward to meeting her in person. 
Lynne gave us an engaging, funny introductory talk about her journey to children’s book illustration. Essentially, her journey involved a lot of hard work, a touch of serendipity and holding a cat to ransom! Not a real cat you’ll be relieved to know and thankfully there was a happy ending to its briefly worrying predicament. 
Checking out Lynne's sketch books
Next, we moved over to the tables where Lynne had brought along a selection of early sketch sheets, roughs and finished artwork. She talked through the stages in her illustration process and we were soon poring over her work, fascinated by it and feeling very privileged to get such a treat! Lynne told us that one of the ways she keeps her illustration work fresh is by sketching outdoors, for the fun of drawing. So after a brief pause for lunch, we had more treats looking through her sketchbooks and her impressively light (and very ingenious) sketch kit. I wish I’d remembered to take a picture of her sketch kit though I did jot down its components! 
From sketch sheet to finished art work 
You can learn all about Lynne and her work from her website and blog; both are a treasure trove of insights, illustrations, sketches and generously shared resources. But in Central North, we feel rather fortunate to have had a closer peek.  Thank you for sharing your journey and work with us Lynne!

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Liz Miller joined SCBWI in 2010. She likes to make lists and is one of life’s volunteers.  When she is not making lists and volunteering for things, she writes picture books. Her picture book Farm Zoo Hullaballoo was Commended at the Winchester Writers’ Conference this year, which made her very happy!

Thursday, 10 July 2014

Finding Your Voice in Southampton

On the 28th June Southampton had it's first SCBWI event - tons of respect to all you event organisers out there! We welcomed Sarah Lean to The Art House Cafe in the city centre. The Art House is a not for profit volunteer run vegetarian cafe that holds interesting and diverse arty crafty cultural events and on the last Saturday in June, we were one of them.

Why 'Voice'? Isn't it what every agent and editor is looking for? It seemed a good starting topic. Back in February Sarah gave Words & Pictures some excellent 'voicey' tips and as she's only in Dorset I asked if she would do a workshop and happily she said yes!

Six SCBWI members meet regularly in the city for a drink and something to eat. It's always a good time and I always come away feeling supported and encouraged. We restrict this monthly meeting to members only but it was wonderful to welcome five non members to Sarah's workshop - here's hoping they may not be non members for long.

Helen Dineen is part of our SCBWI Southampton group, Here's what she had to say about the the workshop:

Helen @aitcheldee
Sarah led us in an in-depth discussion about what Voice really means and how to achieve an authentic voice for your story. We talked about what it really feels like to write in your own voice, as well as the skills you need to edit your work. We worked on getting in touch with our inner child using all our senses, and analysed opening lines to see how a unique voice is immediately established by the best authors. It was also fascinating to hear about the level of detail Sarah creates for each of her characters before writing her books. We all went away with renewed enthusiasm and our notebooks full of useful tips and strategies for improving our own stories.


One of the things that made Sarah's workshop so brilliant was that it connected with people at the beginning of their writing journey…

It was so helpful, very informative and as someone who is very much starting at the bottom it was great to be around so many like minded people. It was my first workshop so it was great to be made so welcome, everyone was really friendly. I wasn't really sure how much detail you could really teach as far as writing for kids is concerned but Saturday's workshop gave me so many new ideas and made me reevaluate my whole method of writing - all for the better. I'd recommend the workshop to anyone.

...and those much further on…

Sarah was wonderfully full of spark and inspiration I came away firing with thoughts and ideas. It was a great session, lots of energy and very inspiring!

Thank you again to Sarah, hoping to welcome you back one day!






Jan Carr is the editor of Words & Pictures. Her fiction is all over the place, she blogs occasionally and loves to write in magenta. You can contact her at editor@britishscbwi.org.



Tuesday, 3 June 2014

Ask a Picture Book Editor








So, you’ve found your UNIVERSAL theme, and you’ve created your 
child-centred characters, now:

Think about the tone and pitch of your writing



One of the key criticisms about texts that cross our desks is that the pitch and tone is too adult and too sophisticated. It’s important that any theme, setting, and interactions between characters are couched in a framework that is appropriate for your readership. There’s no point using grand similes or high-falutin’ imagery that will not resonate or strike a chord with the child. The tone and pitch of picture books needs to be child-centred.

Let’s take writing on the theme of ‘love’ as an example. The love between a parent and child, grandparent and child, between siblings or maybe between friends are the sorts of emotional interactions with which a pre-school child will have had direct contact. Consequently, they will understand these sorts of relationships. So, if your UNIVERSAL theme is love then how do you make it CHILD-CENTERED?
-  choose a type of love that will resonate – i.e. between a parent and a child
-  think of a setting and context that a child will comprehend – the playroom, the woods, the mountains
-  use simple imagery, language and concepts that are tangible

A few fantastic examples are:

 
All the allusions in these texts are easy for a child to grasp because they are centred in the child's world, and they are written with a simplicity of style that makes them perfect for the age group.

Remember that pre-schoolers are not yet self-aware

Pre-schoolers don’t yet have the self-awareness to identify and verbalize how they are feeling. They can’t reflect on their experiences objectively like older children and adults. So don’t make the mistake of having your character say they are ‘lost’ or ‘nervous’ or say ‘I wonder what would happen if . . .’

Pre-schoolers don’t reflect on what’s happening in their world, rather they launch into the action right away. They are much more likely to comment on their immediate experiences in the context of concrete happenings.

Third person narratives work best for picture books as they are aimed at young readers who lack the self-awareness that comes with first person point of view.


Hone and refine your unique author style and voice

So, what is voice?

When you read a book by a particular author, you might be able to tell that it’s written in that author’s voice by the unique style of the writing (how the author writes as opposed to what s/he writes about), the choice of theme, and the way the author puts a unique spin on the story. Voice is your personality and every word must to count!  

When you look at a famous artist's work, say a Van Gogh or a Matisse, it is the use of colour, pattern, textures, brush stroke – the style and themes – that help you to identify the painting as originating from one or the other. 


In a similar way, a strong voice is what identifies your work as yours. It is the link between you and the reader. Plus you need to find the story that only you can tell and tell it in a way that is singular to you!

There are so many wonderful examples of strong author voice in the picture book market – each one speaks to the reader in a distinctive way

As you look at the following examples, think about how each one is different and distinctive. What makes it particularly memorable?



















The challenge is to find your ownvoice, to pinpoint and refine what it is about your writing that makes your stories feel special and unique. This flair and style is often the icing on the cake that will really make publishers and the reading public sit up and take notice of your work.

The best advice is to: 

- read your texts aloud
- join a SCBWI or other critique group
- work on your craft! Seek out opportunities to get advice your craft through SCBWI, a literary consultant or a professional development conference, workshop or course
- practise, practise, practise!


READ OUR OTHER "ASK A PICTURE BOOK EDITOR" CRAFT BLOGS:
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 in the list on the left.






Natascha Biebow is editor, mentor and coach at www.blueelephantstoryshaping.com

 







Sunday, 11 May 2014

Ask a Picture Book Editor

So, you’ve found your UNIVERSAL theme, but what can you do next to make your writing really stand out from the crowd? Our next three blogs will focus on how to hone and refine your craft.
















So how do you make your story child-centred? 

Your text needs to appeal to the child reader. It needs to resonate, engage and encourage readers to empathise with the characters and their story. 

Your characters are one way to immediately captivate your child reader. 


1. Know your character!

- picture them
- name them
- think of their personality and the sorts of things they might say. 
- think about what they eat, what they like, and what motivates them! 

Is your character a child? 

If they’re not, are they the sort of character that will appeal to a child? 
For instance, are they a pirate, a monster, an animal or an alien? 

If your character is not a child are they child-like? 

Do they think, speak and act in a fashion that a child might empathise with? Are they experiencing moods, emotions, difficulties and problems that are relevant and immediate to a pre-schooler and their world? 

Here are some examples where the protagonist is not a child, but shares recognisable characteristics with one:



From left to right . . .

Mr Bear Babysits by Debi Gliori: little bears get up to no good with the babysitter 
Olivia Saves the Circus by Ian Falconer: Olivia is a little pig who tells tall tales about her holiday 
Dr Hoof by Diana Kempton and Garry Parsons: the doctor is a donkey and the patients are all animals with child-like concerns - e.g. a dog has a splinter, a bunny has hurt his ear 
I Really Want to Eat a Child by Sylviane Donnio and Dorothee De Monfreid: the little crocodile is a fussy eater 
A Baby Sister For Frances by Russell Hoban and Lillian Hoban: Frances the badger is learning how to be a good big sister 
Harry The Dirty Dog by Gene Zion: a dog doesn't want a bath 

What motivates your character?


What floats their boat/rocks their world? 

Here are some great examples of books where authors have really got to grips with the dreams and aspirations of their characters: 


From left to right . . .
Duck Says Don’t! by Alison Ritchie and Hannah George: When Goose goes on holiday, Duck really wants to be responsible. But Duck ends up taking things a little too far . . .
Abigail by Catherine Rayner: Abigail loves to count more than anything. But in a busy desert it’s just tricky to find something that will stand still for long enough to be counted! 
It’s a George Thing by David Bedford and Russell Julian: All his friends are good at something and so is George. He’s just desperate to find out what it is.

What does your character really, really want/need and what will happen if he doesn’t get it? 
Some well-observed examples are . . .


From left to right . . . 
Eat Your Peas by Kes Gray and Nick Sharratt: Daisy does not want to eat her peas, no matter what Mum bribes her with. Instead, she turns the tables on Mum – she will eat her peas if Mum will eat her Brussels (but Mum doesn’t like Brussels!).
I Want My Hat Back by John Klassen: Bear’s hat is missing. He desperately wants it back so off he sets on a journey to find it. Nobody he meets seems to have seen his hat – or have they? One sneaky rabbit had better watch out! 
Rhinos Don’t Eat Pancakes by Anna Kemp and Sara Ogilvie: Daisy just wants her parents to listen to her – but they’re always too busy. Too busy to notice the rhino that’s moved in, which is good, because he’s a fantastic listener! 

2. Make your characters’ voice believable: 

- listen to kids on the bus and in a playground 
- note down phrases and words you hear on kids’ TV programmes 
- watch out for interesting personality traits, mannerisms and quirks 

Some fantastic examples of writers capturing all of the above are: 



From left to right . . .
Mabel and Me by Mark Sperring and Sarah Warburton - wonderful child and child-like characters: “Mabel, you are my BESTEST, BESTEST friend because . . . you say the CRAZIEST things!” 
Then Mabel and Me laugh long and hard . . . the way that best friends always do. 
Fancy Nancy by Jane O’Conner and Robin Preiss Glasser - perfectly observed personality and quirkiness:
“I love being fancy. My favourite colour is fuchsia. 
That’s a fancy way of saying purple.” 
Poo Bum by Stephanie Blake - very funny use (or overuse!) of a phrase:
Little Rabbit has learned a new word and he is going to use it over and over again!
“Poo bum!”
I Will Not Never Ever Eat a Tomato by Lauren Child - an extremely good depiction of child voice which immediately resonates with the reader:
“I have this little sister Lola. She is small and very funny. Sometimes I have to keep an eye on her.” 

3. Think about setting:

Make it relevant, familiar or at least shades of familiar.
Does your story revolve around the home, nursery or school?
Is it an outdoor setting? Again, is it familiar like a garden, park, beach or wood?
Is it somewhere further afield like a museum, a palace – the important thing is to make it immediate and appropriate to the child. Pre-schoolers' worlds are really quite small, though the realms of the imagination (pirate ship, alien spaceship or undersea mermaid palace) are often limitless. There aren’t many picture books set in a mausoleum, a betting shop or a graveyard!

4. Focus on relationships with other characters:

Think about the relationships that are going to happen within your story and make the interactions believable.
Think about:
- how the characters talk to each other
- what they do together
- the level and ‘type’ of emotion that occurs between them.
Here are some examples of believable relationships between child and:


parents - Not Now, Bernard! by David McKee
pet - WANTED: The Perfect Pet by Fiona Roberton
siblings - Any Charlie and Lola! book by Lauren Child


grandparents - Mile-High Apple Pie by Laura Langston and Lindsey Gardiner
teacher  - Totally Wonderful Miss Plumberry Michael Rosen and Chinlun Lee
friends - That Rabbit Belongs to Emily Brown by Cressida Cowell and Neal Layton


So here are just a few pointers and tips on how to help make your writing child-friendly and child-centred. Happy crafting and see you next month!




Natascha Biebow is editor, mentor and coach at www.blueelephantstoryshaping.com



Ellie Farmer is Senior Editor at Little Tiger Press www.littletigerpress.com

Sunday, 16 February 2014

Sarah Lean on Voice

Charlotte Comely
@SarahLean1



Warm, friendly and amazingly down to earth were the comments from students after Sarah Lean came to give a pep talk to Creative Writing Students at Winchester University.






Author of A Dog Called Homeless, A Horse For Angel and The Forever Whale, Sarah fully understands how desperate it feels trying to get that first publishing deal. She was working as a primary school teacher while dreaming of being a writer, even after three books out and another two in the pipeline, she describes feeling worried, 'I can't believe it will last.'



So how did she get that foot hold?

Voice.

Her tutor had praised Sarah on capturing a child's voice. Here's an example:

'I wasn't really listening. The tip of my green felt pen had gone inside the tube. I was trying to poke it out with a compass under the desk. We had geography next and you always need a green felt tip in geography.'
A Dog Called Homeless

Several thousand drafts later, getting it wrong, getting it wrong again, Sarah finally had a polished manuscript. Winchester University holds a writing conference every year and Sarah had been asked to show some of the agents around the building. Of course she had a copy of her manuscript with her, but when she handed it over her heart sank as the agent pushed it to the bottom of her pile.

'Remember your opening line. It was the only question the agent asked me.'

Students wondered if Sarah now had everything right and were comforted to hear that she is only human. 'My writing style is so haphazard,' she told us emptying her bag, and at first failing to find a small pad of paper. 'I desperately need to learn to be more organised and disciplined. I often leave the house without paper, so I'm forced to write ideas on scraps which I find again when I'm not expecting it.'


At the moment, Sarah's out of the classroom and writing full time.  Hero is due to be published at the end of this month and Jack Pepper for World Book Day on Thursday 6th March.

Hero is a story about a little dog with the heart of a lion:
Leo feels invisible – at school and at home. When he’s not doing homework with his one friend, George, Leo spends most of his time in his imagination. It’s easy to feel brave if he’s pretending to be a gladiator.

When an accident at school brings Leo overnight fame he likes being centre of attention, for once. But then Leo finds himself doing things he knows are wrong, just to impress his new ‘friends’. And George no longer wants to be friends with a liar . . .

Disaster strikes when a meteor hits the town. A little dog belonging to Leo’s neighbour is missing and Leo knows he must be trapped. If Leo can bring the dog home, can he make it up to the people he’s hurt? Can he be a real hero?

Jack Pepper is Sarah's World Book Day book and another chance for readers to catch up with this loveable four legged character.

Sarah's own loveable four legged character.



SARAH'S TIPS FOR FINDING YOUR CHARACTER'S AUTHENTIC VOICE:

Voice is hard to define. There’s the author and the character, and both are unique. I suppose I’d say the author’s voice has to do with the way characters are written (style, maybe). Character voice portrays a recognisable individual in the story.

...one needs to remember the limit of the child’s knowledge and experience

The story (circumstances that challenge the character) needs to draw on their entire psychology.Writing as a child is not less well-researched than writing as an adult, but one needs to remember the limit of the child’s knowledge and experience. Their habits, the way they move and react are all important but not more important than them as a whole:

Think about the wider environment in which they have been raised and how they have been nurtured. Their experience and their own nature work together. Answer difficult questions such as:

  • What newspaper does the dad read? 
  • What was the parents’ experience of education? 

All these things may be key to understanding the child. These answers are not for the story, they enable you (and therefore the reader) to connect with the character.

I always follow Egris’ tri-dimensional-character bone structure (The Art of Dramatic Writing, Lajos Egris) because it makes me address these questions. It is a challenging exercise, but rewarding. Draw on what you’ve heard, what you've read and think is good, and your own childhood. Experience as a teacher in the classroom was definitely helpful.

It’s more a question of revealing not building a voice

Be yourself, without force, but with lots of practice, which authenticates the voice; let the character be themselves. It’s more a question of revealing not building a voice. Practise restraint over authorial intervention; learn to hear the ‘false notes’ where you’ve lost contact with the character. I think it is a trap to write to order, what you think the industry or the reader wants to hear.

Maintain the development of the character until they seem to speak for themselves. As soon as you find yourself trying to get them to do/say what you want them to do/say (recognisable when things fall flat or feel complicated and stodgy), go back to the character analysis and keep working on it. Something’s missing in your understanding of them.

There's a kind of rhythm and flow when the characters are well formed: individuals speaking on a universal level.

Simplicity is key. That doesn’t mean not challenging the reader’s vocabulary, but the character will not spout purple prose (extremely unlikely anyway). It’s a balance. There's a kind of rhythm and flow when the characters are well formed: individuals speaking on a universal level. That’s what the reader recognises – someone in particular, and also themselves.

Thank You, Sarah.


Charlotte Comley creative writing group organiser and now self employed writer of educational resources. Her fiction has been published by Ether Books, Darwin Evolutions, Flash Flood, Chuffed Books, and 1000 words. Non fiction work has appeared in magazines such as The Green Parent, Take a Break, Woman's Weekly, The Motion Online and Grow It. Charlotte Comley was one of the writers and script editors of Express FM Conway Street, a radio soap airing three times a week for eighteen months. She came highly commended at The Winchester's Writing Conference competition for children's fiction.  In 2012 she read at The Umbrella Festival at The Groundlings Theatre, came third place at Alton's Book Festival The Pint Pot of Fire, at Wordsouth Havant and of course in the Portsmouth Book Fest 20 x 12. She was short listed for the You, Me and Everyone project in Portsmouth and has won various poetry prizes at poetry Cafes.


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